Deonna Gras
Thursday, August 11, 2011
Ever have to burst someone's bubble? Thoughts on my work in progress?
I like. Try looking at removing "I know" from line 10. To me it helps break better the thought before the next sequence. And you last line maybe: "the letter will soon, arrive."
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